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I remember Hazel really well. Sometimes my memories are so clear that I can almost feel her sitting next to me, or walking by my side. Seven years have passed, and I miss her like she went away yesterday.

I met Hazel for the first time when I was twenty; I was an ambitious guy studying psychology who thought that he had already reached happiness, buying a nice car and hanging out with friends. Hazel opened my eyes and, thanks to her, I discovered how beautiful it is helping others and giving them second chances. Hazel helped me grow with her generous words, her patient work and her strawberry candies given to everyone.
She was the most helpful person I've ever known, because she liked to help everyone who needed comfort and never asked for something back; Hazel was happy to receive your smile, and felt satisfied hearing "Thank You", and for her that was enough.

Mostly for its nice sound, her unique name, Hazel Daziel, earned her many nicknames; for someone she was Hazie-Dazie, for someone else simply Haz, and I also heard some people calling her Dazzling Hazel . . . She used to smile hearing all that stuff.
I was the only one who called her Momo; it was one of our little secrets. I chose that name because Hazel reminded me a lot Michael Ende's character: she had, like Momo, the beautiful skill of listening to you truly and carefully.
But it seemed that no one recognized it, and no one could get in the way of what I felt and thought about Hazel; they spoke to her normally, didn't understand they were standing in front of an angel. But I couldn't be angry with my classmates, because at first I acted like them.
In fact, I firstly thought that Hazel had something strange. Not about clothes, or hair--in those things, she was like every twenty-year-old girl. But Hazel had something like a magnetic, shiny aura that brought everywhere she went: her smile, so soft and kind, and her gaze, from those beautiful deep eyes, carried a peaceful feeling I still can't understand. Her goodness was palpable.

I must admit Hazel didn't have a simple nature; she rarely spoke, and the way she looked at you, like she could dig into your hidden side, made people feel uncertain, and most of times they thought she lived in her own world. I was both scared and attracted, and when I looked at her, I didn't know what to do.

Initially, I barely spoke to her, even if I began to feel something more than curiosity inside me. It all happened when we studied together for a test: I was speaking to her, and Hazel nodded and smiled in that way I loved, making me feel comfortable like I've never felt before. And suddenly we were kissing, and that day became the sweetest of my whole life.
I'll never forget those mellow lips, those warm hands, and her beautiful coppery hair. I found my paradise, and it was called Hazel.

We stayed together for more than four years, and every day I discovered something new about my Momo. Stupid things, that weren't useful, like the fact that she loved Barbra Streisand and hated pepper, but made me thought I knew her a little more, and important things, that made me love her more, like the fact that her dream was to do voluntary work in those countries devastated by wars.
I thought we had all the time we wanted, until that Saturday.

We were at the Heathrow airport and Hazel was very happy: her dream was coming true, she was going to do volunteer work for nine months. I remember every single moment: Hazel waved at me, shouted sweet words to me and then walked away, to take her airplane. These things passed in my mind like a never-ending movie for months.

That was the last time I saw Hazel, because she never turned back. Someone killed her, war took her life. Her wonderful, meaningful life.
I don't know very much about how it happened--maybe because I don't want to. I simply know that Hazel is not here, no longer.

Every week I go to her grave, I leave some brooms, her favourite flowers, and I sit in front of it, looking to the little photo under the words "Hazel Martha Daziel 1978-2002 ". I think about those sweet times, and about what I'm doing now. I think about how life could be with her by my side. Sometimes I cry.
And sometimes I also speak, because I hope that , from somewhere, Hazel can still hear me . . .
Work for *Writers-Workshop
This time `Beccalicious asked to write a piece that focused on characters: she gave a list of names and we must choose one and create a story, trying to make something good.

This period is not really happy, I'm always tired and a little sad, and today is dead the grandmother of one of my best friends, so I'm a little sad and all I can write is this. I'm not satisfied, not really much, even if i think that I do a pretty work with Hazel Daziel, one of the name of the list.

Also, 'cause of my sadness, this is a bad-ending love story. Umpf.

It's a little strange for me because I don't want to do something too detailed, I want that everyone could imagine is own Hazel. And the narrator is important, 'cause he's the voice, but he's also like invisible; you only know it's in love with Hazel, but you don't know his name or how he looks like.... Maybe I tried this because I want that everyone focuses on Hazel, but I'm not sure, because I notice this things after I submit it...!

As always, help me with English. I'm improving a lot with your suggestions!

PS: sorry for the strange and confused Artist comment >.<

EDIT
A DD! I still can't believe it... a DD... :faint:
Thanks to `Beccalicious for the suggestion, to ^StJoan for featuring, and to *Writers-Workshop for their fantastic work! :glomp: Thank you very very much!
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Given 2008-02-06
You have to appreciate ~xCamixís writing for the fact English is not her first language. The native Italian has been working hard at her language skills, and this piece really reflects her hard work. An emotive piece that really embraces the characters of the story, Remembering Hazel by ~xCamix is a comforting read for anyone who may have suffered a loss. ( Suggested by BeccaJS and Featured by StJoan )
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ayattousai Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012
woah.... just WOAH... very well done :)
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xCamix Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :aww: glad you like it!
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ayattousai Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012
:)
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Ravenhaven Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2011
Congratulations on the DD!
It is well deserved.
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xCamix Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very, very much :aww:
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kim-fairy2 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
hey :)
Great story. very touching :) I really think you could become a great novel writer!

I have a few small corrections ;)
"but made me thought I knew her a little more" should be "but made me think I knew her a little more", and "looking to the little photo" should be "looking at the little photo".

But even the most popular writer makes small mistakes; they all have someone to correct it before it gets published ;)

great work!
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xCamix Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :blush:
You're really kind :heart:
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celestial-spice Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2009
You are one of those rare people, that, while one language isn't their first, they use what they know of that language to transmit the feelings, the Vibes, of that story. You transferred the pain, the sorrow, and depression and the beautiful hope so amazingly that one cannot help but stop and stare at it in awe. You are a very talented writer, in my eyes. :) Please keep on writing!
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xCamix Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very, very, very much for your words; I appreciate the a lot :heart:
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Writers-Workshop Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2009
Hello!

This piece has been added to the collection What’s in a Name? as it was a submission for the titled workshop.

Thank you

*Writers-Workshop
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cry-to-the-moon58 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2008
This is wonderful. I was surprised to find that English isn't a first language for you. You did so well.
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xCamix Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much... I'm glad you enjoyed it :aww:
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cry-to-the-moon58 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2008
You're welcome. I did, very much.
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xCamix Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
You're really kind :D
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cry-to-the-moon58 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2008
:aww: Thank you!
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tetemeko Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2008
Stunning DD.
I hope to one day master a language as beautifully as you have.
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xCamix Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :aww:
I'm not that good >< But well, I'm sure that if you will keep practicing, you'll become a great writer :)
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entussuenos Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2008
Beautiful. You really hit it on the dot.
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xCamix Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I'm really glad you think so!
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SkyeFyyre Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2008
this is amazing!
i think you really succeeded in making the reader focus on hazel. the ending was really heartbreaking too. great job! :clap:

your english is very good, even with the fact that it's not your first language. i know lots of people who are fluent in english, yet can't write a short, but touching story such as yours. you have talent! :thumbsup::D
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xCamix Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Awww, thank you very very much for such kind words! I appreciate them very very much :hug:
I'm so glad you like it :aww:
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SkyeFyyre Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2008
Your welcome! :D
You deserve it!
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Oleem Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2008
Oh wow. I had no idea English isn't your native language :) You're really good at it. And the story is nice, too. Good job making the characters...the reader really does imagine their own Hazel, like you said.


The one thing I didn't like about this is the ending is too sudden and doesn't flow with the rest of the story. I don't mean the last paragraph, which is beautiful and strong, but the part where Hazel leaves.
"I thought we had all the time we wanted, until that Saturday.

It was June, we were at the Heathrow airport and Hazel was very happy...
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There are two "transition sentences" here, and it's not effective. I think it would be better without "It was June" [or move it to somewhere else in that sentence/paragraph] because it's just getting in the way and doesn't serve much of a purpose.

"Hazel, waving at me, shouted sweet words to me and then walked away, to take her airplane."

There's a thing called "parallel structure" which basically means that all the verbs in the same sentence should be conjugated in the same tense...so either all gerund, or all past tense. It just sounds more natural and "easier" that way, if you know what I mean :)

"Someone killed her, war took also her life."

It's "also took," but you don't even need to say "also." It makes it sound like she died twice, and the reader will understand what you mean.


[If you don't mind, could you please read this [link] :blushes: It's so rare for me to meet Italian writers. But it's probably a total insult to your language...]
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xCamix Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
First, thank you very much for your comment :) I'm glad you think so, and I'm glad you like this piece!

Maybe, I could delete "It was June", and start the sentence with "We were..."? Would it work in this way?

Oh. Ehm.... I've never heard anything about it XD I'll edit it as soon as possible!

You're right, it also sounds better without it.

I'm going to read your piece, indeed. You're really kind!
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Oleem Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2008
It would work if you deleted "it was June." If you want to keep it for a symbolic reason or for the time setting, you could do "We were at the Heathrow airport, it was June, and Hazel was very happy"

Don't worry about it :) Lots of English people don't know about it.

Thank you for reading and helping me with my piece. You're really kind too!
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xCamix Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
It didn't have any symbolic reason, so I simply cut it off XD

Uh, ok. I love to learn new things :)

It was a great pleasure! :hug:
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m0nobody Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2008
At first I thought that english is your first language and then I read an "Author's Comment" and I could not believed that. Your english is very, very good. I wish I could write like you but I understand that not everyone is given so beautiful skill like writing is.

This story is beautiful, especially the end. Words: "And sometimes I also speak, because I hope that , from somewhere, Hazel can still hear me . . ." made me cry... ;(

Keep writing and do it as amazingly as you wrote this :)
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xCamix Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very very much for your kind words :blushes: I'm not that talented, I still need to improve really a lot, but I'm so glad you think I'm good :hug:

Aww, I'm sorry you cried! But it means the story it's expressive, so I'm also a little happy....

Again, thank you very very much :hug:
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m0nobody Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2008
oh, don't be sorry! like the polish poet, Jan Twardowski said: "You know that tears are laughting when they are big enough?" :)))
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xCamix Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
it's a beautiful sentence :aww: thanks again!
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destinykitty Featured By Owner May 10, 2008  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
sad but very sweet and beautiful
nice work :D
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xCamix Featured By Owner May 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much, I'm glad you think so :aww:
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RakistangNars Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2008
oh, this is beyond wonderful :) thumbs up! :D
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xCamix Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very very much! :aww:
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RakistangNars Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2008
you deserve the appreciation.
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MaliceTear Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2008
Congratulations on the Daily Deviations. It is a wonderful piece. :)
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xCamix Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very very much :hug:
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MaliceTear Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2008
You are very welcome. :)
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inspiredimperfection Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2008
congrats on the DD! :hug:
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xCamix Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very very much! :hug:
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Sakura-ART Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2008  Student General Artist
OMG... I thought the story was real :XD: ... Anyway... I like it very much :aww: ...!!! You did a great work :clap: ...!!!
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xCamix Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
LoL :XD: No I invented it :D
I'm relly glad you do,Thank you very very much :aww:
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Sakura-ART Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2008  Student General Artist
Hehe :D ... You're very, very welcome :aww: ...!!!
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SuperHikari Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2008
I can't believe it war took her life. War can be so cruel.
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xCamix Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, it can be.... War is meaningless, in my opinion.
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SuperHikari Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2008
Yea I mean it goes like this China:France Sucks! France:This means war! and then a war starts
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xCamix Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
yeah... stupid stuff
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SuperHikari Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2008
yea
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Ravenhaven Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008
Very good!
A enjoyable read. :)
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xCamix Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much, I'm glad you like it :aww:
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