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Pass, flying, through sky
of various colours;
so big, soft and bright,
it's a quilt of light
on an opal lawn.

It can catch forms
from our fantasy,
and taking up pupils
you'll look at scary dragons,
fluffy animals,
and thousands crazy things.

It's simply amazing
how it can turn from light
to black,
and surrounds us,
bringing rain and rain.

But why do I always look at you?

Probably it's rain;
slipping from you,
falling on us,
drops of your pain
that you occasionally can't contain.
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Fifth work for *Writers-Workshop

Isn't incredible we're at the fifth work?! It's too wonderful!

Anyway... this made me work hard! We must write a "Lipogram". A poem with a missing letter. And the letter was "E".

Can you imagine how is write something in English without "E"??? A suicide, I swear!
Maybe in italian I would have done a better work... but I'm quite satisfied with this.
It isn't a masterpiece, I know it and I've no problem to admit it; but I'm proud because I really thought about every word I wrote before I put it in the poem!

So, I hope you'll enjoy it, at least only a little.

PS. If you see English mistakes, as always, let me notice them !

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:icontheheartseeker:
waow nice
it makes me remind of my poem,"Yagmur"
i wrote that one on a rainy sunday
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I like it. 'it's a quilt of light on an opal lawn.' is inspiring.
:iconxcamix:
Thank you very very much! Glad you like it :]

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I'm really glad of it! [:

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of course i would:)
its always your welcome

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Beautiful, Camilla =D
:iconxcamix:
many thanks :aww:

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Wao.

Adoro la terza strofa.
Non so perchè, ma questa in particolare: probabilmente, rappresenta molto bene (per quello che posso carpire da un approccio personale alla poesia) lo stato di inquietitudine, lieve e meravigliosa incertezza mutabile, cangiante, sorprendente.

Wao!

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Wow this is really great, your hard work really paid off. With each poem you improve and you did a magnificent job writing this without E's! I love your use of adjectives such as 'opal'. I love it:heart:

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"My role in society, or any artist's or poet's role, is to try and express what we all feel. Not to tell people how to feel. Not as a preacher, not as a leader, but as a reflection of us all." - John Lennon

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