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Mhm I think it's about a guy who couldn't handle all of life's problems so he died...or maybe killed himself? So now he's just waiting for true happiness, waiting to go to heaven.

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Ma non è vero XD Devi solo dirmi cosa senti quando lo leggi o ci rifletti su. Sopratutto, SE provi qualcosa mentre lo leggi XD
Grazie mille ** *me commossa asciugare lacrimuccia di nascosto*

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Wow. I've never thought about this interpretation. That's absolutelyan interesting opinion!

So, do you think this could work, or do I have to work on it?

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Could I confess without guilt I don't like it because I hate this kind of poetry?

Psychology says that we put our deep feelings and emotions in stuff that is unclear to us. It's called projection. What I throw of myself now is not pleased at all.

Fortunately last line encourages "it takes strenght to cope with all that drama". That's great touch to end the poem like that!

Sure you can--It's your opinion And I'm always interested in opinions!
Well, I feel better knowing you don't like it 'cause of the genre and not 'cause of my lack of skills XD

That's interesting to know... I'll remember it

It really hit me when I read it, so I had to put it in the poem! Glad you think it's fine!

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Congrats, è davvero profonda e ricca di spunti per eventuali riflessioni personali.
Componimento molto chiaro e incisivo, presenta quasi un modo asettico e lucido di esporre concetti e situazioni.

In particolare la strofa
"Just waiting he's six feet under
to follow the usual pattern"
mi ha colpita parecchio per l'adeguatezza stilistica, paragonabile all'inesorabile consumarsi delle routines cittadine. Sarà quel "six", valore numerico che rende l'idea di qualcosa di schematico e calcolato (come impegni e giornate lavorative), ma anche quell' "usual pattern", mirata espressione di monotonia obbligatoria.
Mi starò sbagliando? o.O"

Ciononostante, credo che il fulcro della poesia si trovi nel
"Where was the chemistry?
We love a gifted mess"
presa di coscienza della vita e di quello che ne facciamo, di come la interpretiamo, a volte in maniera superflua e sbagliata, immersi in sottigliezze e dettagli complicati (forse un po' come sto facendo io adesso o.O")

L'ultima strofa, infine, credo tenda ad accompagnare e concludere in maniera totalmente veritiera e definitiva tutto ciò. Come triste e dolorosa confessione, ci mette davanti la nostra ben nota fatica d'esistere.

Ah, ehm. Non badare a quello che ho scritto, ho un po' di sonno X'D
Comunque bravissima, ottimo lavoro, non è per niente nonsense ^.^

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I think it has potential, some parts I found a bit confusing though like maybe you get off theme sometimes.

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But it also shows that you put a lot of work into this which is always great.

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E invece bado, è super interessante **

Grazie per aver letto e commentato, mi fa sempre piacere scoprire cosa si pensa quando si leggono i miei tentativi di scrittura! ^^

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